Little Red Rocking Hood
Once upon a time there was a little girl called, Little Red Rocking Hood. She lived in a castle at the beach!!!
One day her mum told her to go and visit her grandma because she was sick. LRRH said, “ok.” Her mother also said, “take her some flowers to help her feel better.”
LRRH danced her way to her Granny’s place. On the way she met one of the Big Bad Gorillas. The gorilla said, “hello Little Red Rocking Hood, dancing your way to your grandmas place.” LRRH said “I’m not aloud to talk to strangers like you!”
The other gorillas were in Lala land looking at wood. They were saying “wooooooooood.” But the first gorilla had an idea to trick Little Red Rocking Hood and he ran to Grannys house...He smashed the door open and locked her up in the toilet. He took her clothes off and put them on and got into the bed.
The gorilla was reading Granny’s book when all of a sudden he heard LRRH dancing to the door. She said, “can I come in granny?”
The gorilla said “yess deary.”
She danced her way in and said, “What big eyes you have.”
The gorilla said, “all better to see you with dear.”
LRRH said, “oh granny what big ears you have.”
The gorilla said, “all better to hear you with dear.”
Little Red Rocking Hood said, “WHAT BIG TEETH YOU HAVE!!!”
The gorilla said “all better to eat you with dear!” and he gobbled her up and ran away.
The other gorillas did not hear as gorilla number one ran outside. The gorillas ran because Little Red Rocking Hood was gobbled up.
Prince Caleb, King Javier and Andre the knight gathered their men to fight in battle. A woodsman helped the king fight in battle. When they did their sword got broken by the gorillas. The gorillas ran away the King and Andre ran... after them. But prince Caleb did not go with the others. Instead he ran back to the castle got his death machine. When he found the gorillas he... FIRED the BULLETS at them. They cut the gorillas belly open and LRRH was free...they ran back to Granny’s house opened the toilet door and everyone was free. Everyone lived happily ever after...
THE END
By Javier
1 comment:
Javier, I enjoyed reading your fractured fairytale. You enjoyed our Fairytales unit and this shows in the imaginative elements of your writing. You have worked well towards achieving the learning intention which was to rewrite a known fairy tale using the elements of narrative writing. You used the success criteria to help you create an entertaining fairytale. I particularly like the way you have used direct speech and capital letters to emphasise the important parts. Ka pai! Your next step is to work on including more language features such as similes in your writing and ensure that you stick to the point of your story rather than move into a different story.
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